Xnull has a good point- these things are fun.
If I were to pick one thing I DO like about this piece, it's the fact that each plot point is held until the character knows it for a fact. Heck, most of the characters are never able to connect the magic shop character as Serisun, simply because she never drops her name. Annoying from a writing standpoint, since it means she has to be referred to with pronouns or long descriptive noun chains instead of her name- but it does add an awesome element to the story.
Will's point of view is easily the most shaky, and is the most likely to change drastically as I get around to writing it. But I'll be finishing Gabe's first, and then Trevor's, and so by the time I reach Will, I'll know exactly what I want to contain in that branch.
The thing about the beginning is- I wanted it to be confusing as hell. I wanted the reader to be so confused about the magic that they shrug off the events of the prologue once they're deemed unimportant to the story. And then, later, when the reader becomes informed about the stone's magic, they can go back through and understand it perfectly. It's also a nice room boost- I knew coming into this that I was taking a short story and stretching it for more than it was worth.
And, someday, I'll be able to tone down the frat-ness of those chars. Because, damn- they're so one sided I get paper cuts when I read about them.
Well, I wanted to get Gabe's branch first, since it's the main one. It's a lot easier to tweak the two lesser branches to match the first than it is to try and weave the main branch through the gaps the lesser branches need filled. The problem is, Gabe is such a depressing failure that he's really, really hard to write for. I needed a character whose life was so horridly awful that he wouldn't mind getting his life thrown upside-down. He's one of my first melancholy protagonists, and I simply have no inspiration to write for him. It's a forced labor, and I think that shows.
Originally posted by Locke
Will's point of view is easily the most shaky, and is the most likely to change drastically as I get around to writing it. But I'll be finishing Gabe's first, and then Trevor's, and so by the time I reach Will, I'll know exactly what I want to contain in that branch.
Originally posted by Ves
And, someday, I'll be able to tone down the frat-ness of those chars. Because, damn- they're so one sided I get paper cuts when I read about them.
Originally posted by End
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